Talk:Individuality/@comment-3394768-20120821032846

Yay! First episode! I just have constructive criticism, this is a fan fic after all, haha. I would just say to watch out for spelling and gramatical errors because it makes it a bit harder to read the fic. Also I know you are trying to get the update out quickly, but I feel like this format of doing episodes is kind of rushed. I'd like it to feel more like I'm reading a fic and watching an episode. Like, describe what people are doing or wearing, have more side conversations and such so we can really get to know the characters. I don't know, just my thoughts. But I'm really happy to be a part of this :) it's gonna be a fun journey ahead!